Judy
by
Chris
Knox
PAGE 1
SPLASH PAGE
INT. DAY: HAL HOLBROOK MIDDLE SCHOOL CLASSROOM
JUDY TURNKEY sits on the front of her desk, addressing the class. She is a large and imposing figure, with a tall beehive hair-do, a billowy white sweater and thick white Marge Simpson-like pearls. She smiles a savage rictus that leaves gaping holes by her molars showing her bridge work.
JUDY:
“Good Morning Class. I am Judy Turnkey. You will call me JUDY TURNKEY. Everyone will greet me good morning upon my entry, every day...and be sure to say my name at the end. Now, let us give it a try, shall we?”
PAGE 2
PANEL 1:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY addressing the STUDENTS. All greeting their new instructor obediently. All that is, except two students in the back row, RUS and NAN who are leaning close to each other in quiet deliberation. RUS is a lanky goof with a bowl haircut and thick, messy eyebrows. NAN is a short, weasley scamp with a thin mullet and popping bulging eyes that dart this way and that.
STUDENTS:
“GOOD MORNING, JUDY TURNKEY!”
PANEL 2:
MIDSHOT of JUDY TURNKEY addressing the class.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Very good Children! You are to greet me like that every morning when I…”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS and NAN speaking
RUS:
“If the guy isn't Zelda, why is the game called The Legend of Zelda?”
NAN:
“I don't know man, I’m telling you though, Link is the guy, Zelda is the princess, she's the one you’re rescuing.”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY with dead eyes, but keeping that wide grimace.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Gentlemen. Am I BORING you?”
PANEL 5:
MIDSHOT RUS looking down at his hands, NAN looking up at the ceiling carelessly.
NAN (through clenched teeth):
“Well she's not exactly the Ultimate Warrior.”
PANEL 6,7,8:
A series of CLOSE UP’s of RUS bursting out in laughter, looking up to the ceiling, tears flying out of his eyes, slamming his fist on the desk and finally burying his head in his folded arms.
PAGE 3
PANEL 1:
CLOSE UP of RUS peering up over his folded arms.
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP of RUS peering up over his folded arms looking up.
PANEL 3:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY looking down at RUS. RUS in FOREGROUND hunched over on his desk.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“I can see I’m going to need to keep an eye on you.”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY’S mouth detailing her extensive dental work.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Mr...Goss...is it? Why don’t you come with me.”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY pulling a desk towards her own. She looks contorted and on the verge of losing her composure. Perhaps a hair in her perfect bee hive is out of place and the small of her back is showing. Pantyline?
JUDY TURNKEY:
“I want you to (ugh) sit right...here.”
SFX:
“SCREEEEeeeee”
PANEL 6:
OVER the SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, looking at the desk placed to the left of JUDY TURNKEY’S desk, facing the class.
PANEL 7:
OVER the SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY standing next to RUS’s new desk, her hand on the back of the seat. RUS looking mortified.
JUDY TURNKEY(OFF SHOT):
“Sit Rus…”
SFX:
“pat. pat.”
PAGE 4
SPLASH WIDE SHOT:
JUDY TURNKEY and RUS in FOREGROUND looking out over the class. All STUDENTS can be seen along with info graphics and motivational posters tacked along the wall.
JUDY TURNKEY(OFF SHOT):
“Now that we have that all sorted out, let us go around and introduce ourselves, shall we? I will start…”
PAGE 5
A series of CLOSE UP’s of the STUDENTS as JUDY TURNKEY talks about herself.
PANEL 1:
Billy Kydd with mouth open looking like he's about to be run over by a train.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Many of you might have seen me around town, and yes it’s true, I am from our wonderful little village, but what you may not have known is that this is my first year teaching at Hal Holbrook Middle School.”
PANEL 2:
TODD BISHOP looking at his finger inquisitively.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“So in that way we are alike. It is my first day at Hal Holbrook…”
PANEL 3:
CHRISSY TAYLOR looking absolutely petrified.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...and it is your first day at Hal Holbrook….”
PANEL 4:
JEN SMITH with massive braces breathing with her mouth open, a fly on her tooth.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...But just because it is my first day being a teacher, does not mean I am a push-over.
PANEL 5:
CHESTER QUIMBY who can't see over the desk, his eyes darting to the right.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“If you do not follow my directions or conduct yourself in a manner befitting your age and potential, you will find that I can be quite the disciplinarian.
PANEL 6:
EARL WELLS shaking like a chiwawa.
EARL (whispering);
“p-p-p-penis.”
OFF SHOT:
“pfft.”
JUDY TURNKEY:
“I am the teacher, so it is important that you always follow my directions, and listen when I am speaking…
PANEL 7:
TOM MALLOY wearing a beret scratching his hairless chin with interest.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Be enthusiastic, but do not interrupt.”
PANEL 8:
JAY JAMESON looking at something OFF SHOT.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Have fun but do not be a nuisance.”
PANEL 9:
NAN BEAN with a vacant stupid grin.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Ask questions, but do not be contrary.”
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PANEL 1:
OVERHEAD SHOT of RUS and JUDY TURNKEY. RUS looking down at his hands.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“I will not have chaos in here children...”
PANEL 2:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking down at his hands.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...lest you end up like Russel here.”
PANEL 3:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT or RUS looking out over the class, NAN calling out from the back.
NAN:
“Loser!”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of RUS with his head down.
RUS:
“smirk!”
PANEL 5:
LOW ANGLE SHOT with RUS in FOREGROUND JUDY TURNKEY looming over him looking down at RUS sternly.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“What did I just say?”
PANEL 6:
WIDE SHOT of CLASSROOM. NAN in FOREGROUND showing CHESTER his Legend of Zelda instruction manual. JUDY TURNKEY addressing a STUDENT in the first row.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Jennifer, let us have you go first. Say a little about yourself.”
JENNIFER:
“I don’t know.”
NAN:
“Hey...Hey CHESTER, I got The Legend of Zelda.”
CHESTER:
“Awesome!”
PAGE 7
PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of classroom in chaos. paper airplanes fly through the air, motivational posters hang off the wall, STUDENTS sit on desks, boys grab at the girls. RUS’S desk is still next to JUDY TURNKEY’S. RUS and NAN are in the corner of the classroom wrestling.
PANEL 2:
JUDY TURNKEY walking into the classroom with coffee wearing a new outfit. Something tacky. STUDENTS ignoring her presence.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Good Morning Class.”
STUDENT:
“Oink Oink”
PANEL 3:
SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY in FOREGROUND in PROFILE as she walks to her desk. She is looking over at RUS and NAN who continue to horseplay. RUS is grabbing NAN’S arm.
PANEL 4:
DUTCH ANGLE SHOT of RUS with NAN’S arm, making NAN touch his own crotch. Both are laughing with stupid expressions on their face.
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY with a look of disgust on her face.
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY at her desk, setting her coffee cup down calmly.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Rus, dear, please take your seat.”
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking away from NAN looking back at him.
RUS:
“GAY-BE!”
NAN:
“queer!”
PANEL 8:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sitting at his desk looking out at the class smiling like a goof, JUDY TURNKEY has taken her seat as well but is glaring at RUS with absolute contempt.
PANEL 9:
OVER the SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY writing with a pen on paper. RUS too is on this shot making faces at the class.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Rus...how would you like it if…”
PAGE 8
PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY showing a note to RUS. RUS studying it closely.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...if I sent you to Mr. Butlers office with this note.”
PANEL 2:
POINT OF VIEW of RUS looking at JUDY TURNKEY hand holding the note which is written in delicate cursive.
NOTE:
“Rus is making another classmate touch his genitals.
- Mrs. Turnkey”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS, peering over the note.
RUS:
“I-I-I wouldn't like it?”
PANEL 4:
DUTCH ANGLE JUDY TURNKEY getting up off her seat looming over RUS.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Then stop acting…
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY chapped lips next to RUS’S ear.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...like a fucking idiot.”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS pulling back in horror.
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY smiling.
PANEL 8:
WIDE SHOT of classroom, JUDY TURNKEY standing up gaily, arms out stretched and welcoming.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“GOOD-MORNING CLASS!”
STUDENTS:
“murmurmur…”
PAGE 9
PANEL 1:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of a soccer field. Different games and activities are set up across the grassy field. JUDY TURNKEY addressing the class. RUS can be seen horsing around with NAN away from the class.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Well children, I just can not believe we made it! What an exciting and productive year it has been!
PANEL 2:
EYE LEVEL SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY addressing the students. In the BACKGROUND RUS and NAN play pretend swords. The tops of STUDENTS heads are in FORGROUND as they listen obediently to their teacher.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...and can I just say, thank you children? Thank you for making my first year as a teacher such a fulfilling one. It has not been an easy journey for me I assure you, but this experience has brought me more joy than working at Front Row Video ever could.”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY with mascara running down her cheeks.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“It has been truly a pleasure to serve you…”
PANEL 4:
SHOULDER SHOT of the STUDENTS all smirking and looking at each other in discomfort.
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY using a thumb to clean herself up. In the BACKGROUND NAN is on the ground RUS stands over him with a stick.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Do not turn from your emotions children, for it will leave you empty.”
PANEL 6:
EYE LEVEL SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY turning to face RUS and NAN. The STUDENTS looking on behind her. JUDY TURNKEY is visibly irritated.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Rus and Nan can you please come join us.”
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM SHOT of NAN walking to JUDY TURNKEY, RUS still swinging his stick.
PANEL 8:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS with his stick close to his face in a dramatic meditative stance.
RUS(whipsering):
“If you strike me down, I will become more powerful than you can possibly imagine…”
PAGE 10
PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY screaming at RUS who is OFF SHOT. STUDENTS cover their heads, others turn away, some stare bewildered.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“RUS WHAT IS YOUR PROBLEM. COME HERE THIS INSTANT!”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking to the group. JUDY TURNKEY in the FOREGROUND
PANEL 3:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS looking up at JUDY TURNKEY who is looking down at him.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Rus…”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY looking down at RUS who is OFF SHOT.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...you are going to be a failure, and every time you do, I am going to be there…
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY in a jester type pose, with head to the side, a massive grin across her face. Some STUDENTS behind her look scared, others are smiling. NAN is in the front of the group smiling the widest.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...and I’m GUNNA LAUGH!”
PANEL 6:
OVER HEAD SHOT JUDY TURNKEY with her arms open.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Now you children go forth and seize the day. I will see you next year.”
PANEL 7
WIDE SHOT RUS in the FOREGROUND watching the STUDENTS run off. JUDY TURNKEY is flanked by two other children, one of them NAN.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Be careful who you choose to be friends with Nan, people can drag you down if you let them.”
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PANEL 1:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of a parking lot on The 4th of July. American fanfare fly throughout the little downtown street. In the far distance on Main Street, children walk in a parade with sparklers, adults wearing red white and blue top hats and vests. Teenage RUS and his girlfriend, BETA walk along with their other friends, JOS and CHELLY. They are all laughing while walking to CHELLY’S car. On the other side of the parking lot, LEW LAKER, CARL JUNSEN and 2 other MEATHEADS are drinking beers on the hood of beat up ‘86 camaro. They watch the friends walk to CHELLY’S CAR.
PANEL 2:
COWBOY SHOT of BETA and RUS walking together. CHELLY’S CAR in the FOREGROUND. CHELLY at the driver's door, JOS as the back door.
RUS:
“You guys wanna go hang out at Borders?”
JOS:
“I’m down.”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS and BETA, in the FOREGROUND. CHELLY and JOS with doors open. In the BACKGROUND, LEW is approaching RUS and BETA.
CHELLY:
“Maybe Dan and those guys will be there.”
JOS (eyes rolling)
“Hopefully not.”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of LEW LAKER screaming, spit flying eyes bulging, crushing a beer can.
LEW:
“HEY MOTHER FUCKER!”
PAGE 12
PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of LEW LAKER pointing back over to CARL JUNSUN and MEATHEAD FRIENDS all smiling and drinking beer.
LEW:
“MY FRIEND HERE THINKS YER A FAGGOT!”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of all friends, RUS looking over his shoulder, BETA looking disgusted. JOS and CHELLY looking at each other worried with the doors of the car open.
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS taking BETA around the waist and walking her to the car, CHELLY and JOS getting in.
RUS:
“That’s great.”
PANEL 4:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of LEW punching RUS in the back of the head. RUS stumbling forward. BETA getting out of the way looking surprised.
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT from inside the car. CHELLY is starting the car in a panic. JOS from the back seat is looking on with concern. RUS is stumbling towards the car and BETA faces off with LEW.
PANEL 6:
SHOULDER SHOT, we are looking into the cars windshield. CHELLY looking back at JOS helping RUS in the car as he dives in.
PANEL 7:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS recoiled in fear as LEW kicks the window of the car.
BETA, outside the car yelling at LEW, MEATHEADS hoot and laugh.
LEW:
“COME ON FAGGOT. COME ON”
BETA:
“What the fuck are you doing Lew?!”
PANEL 8:
SHOULDER SHOT RUS in FOREGROUND completely panicked. LEWS face pressed against the window.
LEW:
“IMA KILL YOU PUSSY!”
RUS:
“JUST DRIVE CHELLY!”
PAGE 13
PANEL 1:
WIDESHOT of CHELLY’S car driving out of the parking lot, LEW throwing his beer at the car. MEATHEADS laughing. BETA in FOREGROUND looking over her shoulder.
BETA:
“You guys are fucking meatheads.”
MEATHEADS (OFF SHOT):
“Hahahah...ahhh fuck you bitch.”
PANEL 2:
SHOULDER SHOT looking into the car from the windshield. CHELLY driving looking in the rear mirror. RUS looking panicked.
RUS:
“CHELLY! WE HAVE TO GO BACK FOR BETA!”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of CHELLY'S CAR stopped at the curb. The rear door opened, RUS trying to get out.
CHELLY:
“RUS!”
RUS:
“Just lemme out and go back!”
PANEL 4:
WIDESHOT of RUS standing by a fire escape in an alley. CHELLY’S CAR speeding off.
PANEL 5:
WIDE SHOT of RUS standing in an ally with his hands behind his head.
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sitting on the steps of the fire escape with his face in his hands crying.
PANEL 7:
CLOSE UP of RUS crying into his hands.
JUDY TURNKEY(OFF SHOT):
“boo-hoo.”
(MAKE SURE THAT JUDY BECOMES MORE MONSTROUS WITH EVERY APPEARANCE. SO SHE IS MOST HUMAN IN THIS SCENE, AND MOST MONSTROUS BY THE AIRPORT MALL SCENE)
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking up out of his hands.
JUDY TURNKEY(OFF SHOT):
“boo. hoo.”
PAGE 14
PANEL 1:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS looking up the fire escape. Entangled in the stairs and platform is a silhouetted spider-like figure with glowing golden eyes.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Boo-Hoo little Rus...little puss.”
PANEL 2:
LONG SHOT of RUS recoiled on the step of the fire escape as JUDY TURNKEY descends upon him.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“tck-tck-tck.”
“...now that was really something.”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sitting now with JUDY TURNKEY crawling next to him, contorted and inhuman, her head twisted to impossable angles, her teeth bared.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“I mean I always knew that you would grow up to be a loser…”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of RUS turned twords us, eyes shut, welled with tears. JUDY TURNKEY’S talking to the back of his head.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...but a coward?”
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...tck-tck-tck…”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sitting. JUDY TURNKEY on the other side of him. He has turned his head away from her, crunching his face into a ball, tears running down his cheeks. He is in utter agony, but does not bother to get up...because after all, this is all in his head.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“What do you think is happening to her right now Rus? As you sit here crying like a little bitch...I’m sure they’ll just smack her around a little SHe’s tough….she can handle it.”
PANEL 6:
LOW ANGLE SHOT RUS clutching his head, JUDY TURNKEY looms over him, her multitude of spider hybrid arms reach out around him. A tinger on her chin as she contemplates.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“But now that I think of it, you know what's more than likely. They’ve dragged her off behind some dumpster to My Country Tis of Thee her sweet little ass.”
PANEL 7:
GROUND SHOT Rus walking away from the step
RUS:
“I gotta go back.”
JUDY TURNKEY:
“HAHAHA for what RUS? They all already know you’re a coward, you'll just...wait.”
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY smiling, her eyes wild.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Did you...did you piss your pants.”
PANEL 9:
KNEE SHOT of RUS looking down at his crotch, stained dark just now realizing what he did. JUDY TURNKEY in BACKGROUND, head thrown back, laughing.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Oh my god Russ...HAHAHA...oh my...GOD!”
PAGE 15
PANEL 1:
POINT OF VIEW SHOT of CHELLY’S CAR from interior. The headlights dousing RUS as he squints and covers his eyes, he is alone… of course.
PANEL 2:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOUT of RUS, CHELLY'S CAR in profile. JOS is in the front seat with his arm hanging out looking up at RUS with concern. BETA is holding the rear door open looking at RUS.
JOS:
“We got ‘er.”
BETA:
“Get in.”
PANEL 3:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS and BETA in the back seat. BETA looking at RUS. RUS looking at us, more mad than ever.
PANEL 4:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS and BETA in the back seat. BETA looking at RUS. RUS looking out his window.
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS and BETA in the back seat. BETA looking out her window. RUS looking out his window.
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP of BETA hand on her lap, and RUS hand on the seat in between them.
PAGE 16
PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of an old brick apartment building in Portland, Maine, other brick buildings rises out of the fog in the distance, a seagull in the FOREGROUND calls out.
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of JON on an old PC playing a shooter. He is dressed in an old goodwill suit. MATT dressed a little more casually, stands over him watching JON play the game.
JON:
“They used the DOOM engine and ended up making a better game.”
MATT:
“It’s pretty smooth, but better than Doom?”
PANEL 3:
POINT OF VIEW of the computer. JON staring at us intently, MATT leaning in. In the BACKGROUND the buzzer is going off.
JON:
“Guess it depends on how you feel about Robert Jordan.”
SFX(door buzzer):
“Urrr.”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of the game JON is playing. A very dated first person fantasy shooter.
JON (off shot)
“Can you get that?”
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of MATT pushing the button on the buzzer, but still focused on the game.
MATT:
“Hello?”
PANEL 6:
Medium shot of intercom and Matt still holding on to the button. MATT looking away anoyed
RUS(OFF SHOT):
“Hey Jon, it’s Rus. Just seeing if your up for hanging out.”
MATT(mutter):
“Christ…”
PANEL 7:
POINT OF VIEW SHOT from the computer, JON still focused on his game, MATT in BACKGROUND with his hand off the intercom.
MATT:
“He’s just going to bum smokes all day then try to crash on your floor.”
JON:
“S’fine.”
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP of MATT leaning towards the intercom.
MATT:
“Asshead can’t even tell us apart”
“M’kay.”
PANEL 9:
MEDIUM SHOT of JON and MATT at the computer. RUS has entered, looking a little like a homeless person. MATT rolling his eyes. JON smiling.
RUS:
“Oh hey Matt I didn't know you were here.
MATT:
“pfft.”
PAGE 17
PANEL 1:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS on the computer playing the fantasy shooter. JON and MATT lounging in a chair and a sofa. RUS’S snow gear is piled in a heap next to the door, a puddle of water collecting underneath.
RUS:
“So this is based on the Wheel of Time?”
JON:
“Yeah, it spans from The Eye of the World, to The Dragon Reborn.”
RUS:
“Amazing.”
PANEL 2:
SHOULDER SHOT of JON breaking open a pack of cigarettes. MATT sitting on a recliner with a laptop.
SFX:
“crinkle-crinkle”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS facing the computer, but eyes darting over to where JON is sitting taking out a cigarette.
PANEL 4:
OVER THE SHOULDER shot of JON and MATT on the sofa. MATT looking at JON irritated. RUS looking at the computer.
RUS:
“Think I could get one of those smokes off ya Jon?”
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of JON looking at RUS (OFF SHOT) MATT looking at JON with a disgusted look on his face.
MATT:
“pff.”
JON:
“Sure Rus...no problem.”
--MID PAGE BREAK--
PANEL 6:
WIDE SHOT from in the hallway of JON’S apartment building. RUS standing at the doorway of JON’S apartment. Slinging his backpack over his shoulder.
RUS:
“No man, I totally get…”
PANEL 7:
WIDE SHOT of RUS standing on the marble steps of JON’S apartment building, his breath billowing out as steam. Snow is falling and icey frost clings to everything, parked cars are buried in white powder, narrow paths are cut where the sidewalks should be. Bundled up pedestrians trudge through the snow.
PANEL 8:
HIGH ANGLE WIDE SHOT of RUS trudging through the snow.
PAGE 18
PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of FREDDY’S APARTMENT, not nearly as nice as JON’S. It is on the ground floor behind a smoke shop. A two step wooden porch leads to the entrance, it is covered in snow. Tracks in the unshoveled walkway lead out but not in. RUS is trudging through the snow approaching FREDDY’S door.
PANEL 2:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, knocking on the door.
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP with his ear to the door. There is a cat stepping gingerly through the snow in the BACKGROUND.
RUS:
“Freddy? Freddy, you home man?”
PANEL 4:
ONE POINT PERSPECTIVE SHOT of the FRONT of FREDDY'S APARTMENT. The front of the apartment and its windows running along the left of the panel. RUS, still standing on the porch arching his back to get a better look at the windows.
PANEL 5:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS with his hands spread wide on the window. Knee deep in snow.
PANEL 6:
LOW ANGLE SHOT INTERIOR of FRANKY’S APARTMENT the window slightly open.
SFX:
“Kurkk”
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM SHOT FRANKY’S APARTMENT: EXTERIOR RUS’S legs hanging out of the window. His backpack set in the snow.
PANEL 8:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of RUS sprawled out on FRANKY’S couch with dirty socks and toe sticking out. His backpack next to him, creating a puddle of water underneath. RUS is smoking cigarettes music playing out of a record player.
RECORD PLAYER:
“I was talking to Chuck, in his Genghis Khan suit. And his wizard's hat…”
PAGE 19
PANEL 1:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS laying on the couch blowing out cigarette smoke. Out of the window FRANKY and his PARENTS walk by.
FRANKY’S DAD:
“Is someone in there Franklin?”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS laying on the couch in FOREGROUND the front door opening with just FRANKY sticking his head in.
FRANKY:
“Uhhh... Rus?”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS still laying on the couch staring at the ceiling oblivious.
RUS:
“Hey Franky, Would you hold it against me if I said I liked Lou Reed better solo?”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT(same as Panel 2) of FRANKY standing at the front door, but now it’s wide open revealing his parents behind him. They are both looking into the apartment with confused looks on their faces.
PANEL 5:
WIDE SHOT of FRANKY’S entire apartment. RUS is getting up scratching the back of his neck, FRANKY has entered, putting his belongings on the table.
FRANKY:
“Rus, these are my parents, Mom, Dad this is Rus…”
PANEL 6:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of RUS putting his boots on, FRANKY looking down at him.
RUS:
“Oh man Franky, I didn't know you were going to have company.”
FRANKY:
“Well, I mean it’s my apartment so I guess you wouldn't.”
PANEL 7:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS squeezing out of FRANKY’S front door. FRANKY'S PARENTS standing in the doorway looking at RUS with the same look of confused bewilderment they had upon entering.
FRANKY:
“Seeing how ...you don’t live here.”
RUS:
“Yeah that makes sense, Nice meeting you.”
PANEL 8:
WIDE SHOT outside of FRANKYS. FRANK on the breezeway door looking down at RUS. RUS off the steps looking back up at FRANKY.
FRANKY:
“How did you get in exactly?”
RUS:
“Window. Mind if I stop by again later?”
FRANKY:
“I’m going up to Freeport with my parents tonight, I won’t be home.”
PANEL 9:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking up at FRANKY (OFF SHOT) expectantly.
PANEL 10:
HIP SHOT of FRANKY looking back down at RUS (off shot).
FRANKY:
“So…”
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PANEL 1:
HIGH ANGLE OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of FRANKY, RUS walking off still looking at FRANKY.
RUS:
“No man, totally. Have fun, I’ll see ya when you get back into town.”
PANEL 2:
WIDE SHOT FRANKY’S APARTMENT EXTERIOR. RUS walking towards us, his neck hunched in his shoulders with a pissed off look on his face. FRANKY standing on the porch looking at RUS walking away in the snow looking regretful.
FRANKY:
“Ok man, talk when I get back...okay?”
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PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT RUS walking through the snow, people passing him.
PANEL 2:
WIDE SHOT SHREES apartment exterior. A street side entrance with granite stones. Wrought Iron Bars over the windows.
RUS is standing outside knocking on the door.
SFX:
“knock-knock-knock”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS waiting, looking worried.
SHREE (from inside):
“Ha-ha-ha. Hold on someones at the door.”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP OF RUS waiting, eyes darting off to the side.
SHREE(from inside):
“...Will you stop!...AHAHAHAH”
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of RUS ringing the back of his neck, looking up and away.
SHREE(from inside):
“You so stupid…”
PANEL 6:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, SHREE standing with the door open, looking back into the apartment smiling at someone.
PANEL 7:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, SHREE looking at him, her smile has fallen into a frown.
SHREE:
“Hey Rus.”
PANEL 8:
WIDE PERSPECTIVE SHOT of RUS standing at SHREES door.
RUS:
“Just seeing what you're up to Shree.”
SHREE:
“Rus, I can't have you here.”
PANEL 9:
WIDE SHOT of SHREE’S APARTMENT INT. A lamp withoput a shade and a tv offer the little light in this room. In the FOREGROUND a few STONERS, CHET, LEE and Terri lay about watching t.v. TERRI is packing a bong. Smoke lingers above them. They smile at each other devilishly. SHREE, holding the door open, but it blocks who she is talking to.
RUS(OFF SHOT):
“I got the cream, I’m good.”
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PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of STONERS(same as PG. 21 PN. 9) , SHREE in BACKGROUND talking with RUS. CHET hiding her face quietly laughing, TERRI absently packing the bowl looking at the door, mouth gaped.
SHREE:
“It’s not about that Rus, people are really pissed, you had a threeway with Devo and that other chick and now everyone at Karens place has scabies.”
TERRI:
“Naww. Oh man…”
PANEL 2:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, SHREE closing the door peering out at him through the small gap as she closed the door.
SHREE:
“Take care Rus…”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP PROFILE SHOT of RUS with his nose to the door.
STONERS(OFF SHOT):
“HAhHAHAHaHAH!”
“But he got the cream Shree!
“HAHAha”
“But Shree! I got the CREAM!”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking away from SHREES door.
SHREE(OFF SHOT):
“You guys shut up. He’s gunna hear you... (inaudible)”
PANEL 5:
WIDE SHOT of RUS walking through the snow down a main boulevard.
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PANEL 1:
WIDESHOT of RUS standing dockside smoking in the old port. Fishermen bringing in the days catch in the distance, seagulls flying overhead. Cats move about underneath the fish processing plant.
FOOT SHOT of RUS the boats on the bay. A voice emmits from below the dock.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Heh heh heh…Russss.”
PANEL 2:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS peering out over the dock into the water.
PANEL 3:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking down into the water at FLOTSAM.
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of FLOTSAM looking vaguely humanoid.
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of RUS, looking with interest into the water (off shot).
RUS:
“Hello?”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of FLOTSAM looking more like JUDY TURNKEY.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Ruuuusssssss… Heh heh heh.”
PANEL 7:
CLOSE UP of RUS
RUS:
“You.”
PAGE 25
PANEL 1:
OVER HEAD SHOT of RUS looking down at JUDY TURNKEY as she climbs up the dock supports toward him.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“You’re wearing out your welcome Russel. Like you always do. They’re starting to see who you really are. The sooner you set up a tent outside, and start asking for money, the sooner you can come to terms with what I have been trying to tell you since the 5th grade...”
PANEL 2:
GROUND SHOT, RUS backing away with as much dignity as he can muster. JUDY TURNKEY climbing over the edge of the dock.
RUS:
“Oh y-yeah...and w-what that?!”
JUDY TURNKEY:
“That you’re a fool Rus. You’re a bum, You’re a fucking loser…”
PANEL 3:
HIP SHOT RUS holding onto the straps of his backpack, fighting back tears, running through brick laid allys, the docks in the distance, JUDY TURNKEY in BACKGROUND pursuing him, her multitude of arms supporting her high above the ground.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...and anyone that spends enough time with you is going to figure that out. So run Rus. RUN! Go find someone else to drain, to use.”
PANEL 4:
WIDE SHOT of a busy street. RUS running out of the dark ally, JUDY holding back, not daring to go out of the ally.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“See who else is out there to take care of you. See who else can stomach you...”
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of JUDY raising a dead fish to her mouth.
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP OF JUDY biting into the fish.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“much-munch-munch…”
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PANEL 1:
WIDE ESTABLISHING SHOT of RUS’S parents house, with a priority given to the GARAGE.
PANEL 2:
INT. GARAGE. WIDE SHOT of a very cluttered garage. In the back admist the saws and lumber is a bedthat has been set up and a television is on.
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS laying on the bed playing video games, cigarettes, a pot pipe and beer cans lay strewn around him. RUS looks older than before, and overweight, he has a long beard. He doesn't look too healthy.
PANEL 4:
OVER THE SHOULDER shot of RUS playing MANHUNTER, the walk -in door to the garage can be seen.
VIDEO GAME:
“I’m going to murder your ass with a chainsaw!”
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of the video game’s main character suffocating another man with a plastic bag. Sound Effect coming from behind the television.
SFX:
“Urrrrrreee…”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of back of television, RUS peeking over it.
PANEL 7:
OVER THE SHOULDER shot of RUS looking at his mom LANNY who is standing in the doorway.
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP SHOT of RUS in profile looking at the television.
RUS:
“Hey Mum.”
VIDEO GAME:
“Murder that fucking bitch DO IT NOW!”
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PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of LANNY in the doorway.
LANNY:
“Uh. So Reghan just called…”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS peeking over the top of the television.
RUS:
“Pfft, Reghan? What did she want?”
LANNY:
“She said she wanted you to call her.”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS continuing to play video games.
RUS:
“Kay, thanks…”
PANEL 4:
POINT OF VIEW OF THE TELEVISION RUS holding the controller. SOUND EFFECTS of the game emitting.
SFX:
“perfect KILL!”
PANEL 5:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS playing his game, LANNY is standing in the doorway still.
PANEL 6:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS in profile, looking up.
PANEL 7:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT OF RUS LANNY standing there.
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP OF RUS looking over the t.v.
RUS:
“What Mum?”
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PANEL 1:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS standing in front of the garage looking up his driveway. REGHANS car pulling in.
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP OF RUS taking a drag off his cigarette.
PANEL 3:
SHOULDER SHOT of REGHAN getting out of the car.
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of REGHAN standing behind the car door with her arms draped over it, with a solemn look on her face.
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS squinting as he takes a drag off of his cigarette.
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP of RUS.
RUS:
“Fuck.”
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PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of RUS’S PARENTS HOUSE.
RUS is walking out of the garage with a cardboard box his XBOX sloppily thrown in. His car is in shot with the trunk open, more belongings are haphazardly stowed inside. RUS mother is standing next to the open trunk.
LANNY:
“Are you sure you want to do this Rus?”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS putting the XBOX in the trunk
LANNY:
“You don't love her Rus.”
PANEL 3:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS closing the trunk of the car.
RUS:
“Well…”
PANEL 4:
OVER THE SHOULDER of LANNY RUS with his butt on the trunk looking towards ROUTE 9
RUS:
“...I think this family has had its fair share of dead beat dads, and I'm not going to be one of ‘em.”
PANEL 5:
WIDE SHOT OF RUS’S PARENTS PROPERTY from ROUTE 9.
LANNY:
“You can still be present. You don’t have to live with someone you don’t love to be a dad.”
PANEL 6:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS lighting a cigarette with his mom in the background looking on.
LANNY:
“You deserve to be happy.”
PANEL 7:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of LANNY as RUS’S car drives up the driveway.
PANEL 8:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS driving, belongings piled up behind him. JUDY TURNKEY laughing from behind the seat.
JUDY TURNKEY(off shot)
“Heh, heh, heh…”
PANEL 9:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking in the rearview mirror.
RUS:
“Shut the fuck up.”
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PANEL 1:
DAY: REGHANS APARTMENT, MEDIUM SHOT of RUS and REGHAN sitting on the couch together with her head in his lap.
PANEL 2:
NIGHT: MEDIUM SHOT of RUS playing video games.
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sleeping on the couch, all the lights are out. He has a blanket and pillows to indicate that he has not just fallen asleep watching T.V.
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP SHOT of RUS sleeping on the couch, facing us.
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sleeping on the couch, facing us.
REGHAN (OFF SHOT):
“You don't have to sleep out here...”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sleeping on the couch, rolled over so that his face is in the cushions.
RUS:
“Hmm mm.”
PAGE 32
PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS and REGHAN sitting on the couch watching T.V.
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP of REGHAN looking at RUS as he watches T.V.
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS laughing.
PANEL 4:
SHOULDER SHOT of REGHAN looking at the T.V. with a half smirk on her face. RUS laughing loudly.
PANEL 5:
NIGHT: MEDIUM SHOT RUS playing video games. Pot and beer paraphernalia scattered around him.
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sleeping on the couch with his usual blankets and pillow set up. Lights and T.V. are off.
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS sleeping on the couch, rolled over so that his face is in the cushions.
REGHAN(off shot):
“Rus…”
PANEL 8:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of REGHAN, looking down at RUS who is sleeping with his face stuffed in the back cushions.
REGHAN:
“>sob< Rus..Wake up…>sob<”
PANEL 9:
CLOSE UP of RUS turning his face over his shoulder, out of the cushions.
RUS:
“Ugh?”
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SPLASH:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of REGHAN looking down at RUS. Silhouetted from the hall light, tears streaming down her face, (Sin City?)
REGHAN:
“Rus, I lost the baby…”
PAGE 34
PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of REGHAN and RUS sitting on the couch RUS putting a comforting arm around her. REGHANS head is buried in his arms. RUS staring off shot in a daze.
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS making tea in the kitchen in his boxers, we can see through a cubby window REGHAN curled up on the couch watching reality t.v. It's the same night.
PANEL 3:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of RUS putting REGHAN in bed.
PANEL 4:
REGHAN rolled onto her side, away from RUS, her face scrunched up, tears welling in her eyes. RUS sitting on the edge of the bed rubbing her back looking down the hall.
PANEL 5:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of RUS spooning REGHAN in bed, under the covers.
PANEL 6:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of REGHANS ROOM, MORNING, RUS getting out of bed.
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM shot of RUS sitting on the toilet.
PANEL 8:
HIP SHOT of RUS facing the toilet flushing it.
PANEL 9:
OVER HEAD SHOT of RUS looking at the water spin.
PAGE 35
PANEL 1:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS looking down at us.
PANEL 2;
CLOSE UP SHOT of RUS lifting up the toilet seat
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP SHOT of RUS inspecting underneath the toilet seat
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP SHOT of RUS inspecting the rim of the toilet bowl.
SFX:
“Shuffle.”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS looking over his shoulder crouching on the bathroom floor.
PANEL 6:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of REGHAN looking down at RUS. RUS in the FOREGROUND looking into the toilet ashamed.
PAGE 36
PANEL 1:
DAY: EXTERIOR of REGHANS APARTMENT. MEDIUM SHOT of DARIN sitting in a beat up ECLIPSE. DARIN is wearing a sleeveless shirt. He has a tight fade and is smoking.
PANEL 2:
LOW ANGLE of DARIN with a rollie cigarette in his mouth turning the pages of a c.d. album.
REGHAN (OFF SHOT):
“>sob<, >sob<, >sob<, >sob<...fucking BASTARD!..”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS holding a cardboard box with his XBOX haphazardly stuffed in it. He is looking at us with a pained expression.
PANEL 4:
REGHAN sitting at a table looking down into the drive way. She is smoking in her bathrobe, she looks awful. Her hair is a mess and her face is blotchy and tired from crying.
REGHAN:
“Go run off to your boyfriend.”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS looking into the box he is holding bashfully.
RUS:
“I’m sorry…”
PANEL 6:
SHOULDER SHOT of REGHAN looking straight at us.
REGHAN:
“FUCK”
REGHAN:
“YOU.”
REGHAN:
“RUS.”
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM SHOT of front door closed.
SFX:
“click”
PANEL 8:
MEDIUM SHOT of something exploding into a million pieces.
SFX:
“SHASH!”
PANEL 9:
CLOSE UP of REGHAN her face screaming, tears, crunched up face.
REGHAN:
“gasp…”
PAGE 37:
PANEL 1:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of hallway as RUS walks towards us with his box. His shoulders are hunched up as if he can feel the scream emintating out of the apartment.
REGHAN(in large dramatic letters):
“FUCK YOU!”
PANEL 2:
WIDE SHOT of RUS standing in the freight elevator.
PANEL 3:
WIDE SHOT of the apartment door.
SFX:
“SHASH!”
“CLINK!”
“CRASH”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of RUS as the elevator doors are almost shut.
PANEL 5:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of RUS in the elevator looking down at his box.
SFX:(continues through entire scene)
“WURRRrrrrrrrrr”
PANEL 6:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking at us.
JUDY TURNKEY(OFF SHOT from above):
“Heh heh heh heh.”
PANEL 7:
OVER HEAD SHOT of RUS with his eyes looking up but his head looking towards us as little as possible. As in, we can just barely see his eyes looking our way, but we can feel that he does not want to see what we all know is there.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Heh heh heh heh...For FUCK SAKE RUS.”
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP of RUS with his eyes tightly closed, his teeth bared.
RUS:
“Not now.”
PAGE 38
PANEL 1:
LOW ANGLE SHOT, RUS with his head down his eyes squeezed shut. Above him through the metal grate of the industrial freight elevator we can see JUDY TURNKEY with her face pressed against it, her eyeball pushing through the grate.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“I am constantly amazed by you.”
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY the lighting from the elevator shining.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“What a selfless act, to convince someone you actually loved them for the sake of the child you made. What a hero! What a fucking white night!”
PANEL 3:
OVER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY ripping the top of the elevator off.
PANEL 4:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS recoiling as JUDY TURNKEY is pouring into the elevator like black pudding.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“I’ll show you all! This is how you take care of your own, let it never be said that Russell B Goss ever reneged on his biological responsibilities.”
PANEL 5:
WIDESHOT of JUDY TURNKEY looming, with her finger in the air as she proclaims mockingly from RUS’S perspective. RUS who is now in the corner of the elevator, the box and its contents spilled out onto the floor.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Who cares about my own happiness, fuck what I want in MY life, I’m here to proove a point. I'll just live my entire fucking life unfulfilled and when I die they can write, “He did his duty.” on my gravestone.
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP RUS pushed against the wall, JUDY TURNKEY close to his face,
JUDY TURNKEY:
“If only the baby had lived...then you could have really shown your old man.”
RUS:
“...no no no no no no no no…”
PANEL 7:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY looking down at RUS.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“But, oh well no need to hang out here anymore is there?“
PANEL 8:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY and RUS
JUDY TURNKEY:
“You know, you really hit the gold mine here Rus. This oneis gunna take you make no matter what. So don't worry, As soon as things get too hard for you out there,she’ll take you back, like she always does.
Although she did seem pretty pissed this time…”
PANEL 9:
CLOSE UP of RUS curled up crying.
JUDY TURNKEY (OFF SHOT):
“Probably caught you counting the days...How far did we get Rus? 25, 26? Exactly how much time is needed to get over a miscarage.”
PAGE 39
PANEL 1:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of RUS screaming at JUDY TURNKEY.
RUS:
“Shut up! JUST SHUT THE FUCK UP! WHAT DO YOU WANT FROM ME !?”
PANEL 2:
WIDESHOT of JUDY TURNKEY grabbing RUS by the throat.
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of EMERGENCY STOP BUTTON.
PANEL 4:
JUDY TURNKEY’s arachnid like foot slamming into the EMERGENCY STOP BUTTON
SFX:
“ERRRRRRRR.”
PANEL 5:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS grabbing onto JUDY TURNKEY’s hand as she is pinning him against the wall high above her head. JUDY TURNKEY looking up at him smiling.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“I want you to be honest with yourself for once in your life. I want you to admit that you are a selfish user, who puts on a charming face to get people to like them.”
PANEL 6:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY, RUS grabbing desperately onto her wrist.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“You don't give a shit about Reghan, you just got sick of sleeping in you parents garage.”
PANEL 7:
FOOT SHOT of RUS’S feet hanging a few inches off the ground.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“In Portland Franky was good to you, but as soon as he stopped letting you sleep on his couch, it was time to find a new friend, a friend that could put up with you, a friend you could get something out of, a friend that didnt know you well enough to know what a fucking loser you are.”
PANEL 8:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, JUDY TURNKEY looking down at the floor to the left, her eyes pointed up at RUS with a devilish look on her face.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...and you didn't care about Beta either.”
RUS:
“You...chut...up.”
PAGE 40
PANEL 1:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY eyes
JUDY TURNKEY:
“That's why you left her in the parking lot…”
PANEL 2:
LOW ANGLE SHOT OF RUS still being pinned to the side of the elevator furious, his eyes bulging, saliva flying out of the sides of his mouth.
RUS:
“ung..UNG!”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY whispering into RUS’S ear, his eyes wild.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...with men that wanted to kill you. You didn't care about going back until you realized what…”
PANEL 4:
SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY turned almost entirely towards us with a mocking surprised look, but somehow still managed to keep RUS pinned to the wall with her multitude of legs.
JUDY TURNKEY:
”Oh shit! Chelly drove me out here. How am I going to get home?”
PANEL 5:
WIDE SHOT OF RUS raging as he reaches and kicks at his captor. Like a bully at a playground she has her head lifted up, laughing maniacally.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“HAhaHAaHAhaHAAH!”
PANEL 6:
FOOT SHOT of RUS’S FEET dangling.
JUDY TURNKEY(off shot):
“heh heh heh.”
PANEL 7:
RUS body falling in a heap on the floor.
SFX:
“THUMP!”
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP OF THE EMERGENCY BUTTON.
PANEL 9:
JUDY TURNKEY hand pulling the EMERGENCY BUTTON out
SFX:
“THUNK”
PAGE 41
PANEL 1:
CLOSE UP of RUS with his face in hands curled up. JUDY TURNKEY legs that cut across the picture plane forming a cage around RUS.
SFX:
“Wurrrr.”
RUS:
“I would have stayed, I would have raised that baby.”
PANEL 2:
LOW ANGLE SHOT JUDY TURNKEY looking down at RUS.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Why? So that everyone would know you were not like Donnie? Please, you wouldn’t have lasted a year…”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS this time looking up at JUDY TURNKEY who is off shot.
RUS:
“No…”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP RUS in FOREGROUND JUDY TURNKEY, kneeling down to make close eye contact with RUS.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Yesssss Rus. Yes.”
PANEL 5:
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of RUS laying in bed with REGHAN back to back.
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP OF RUS looking at us.
RUS:
“Thank God.”
PANEL 7:
CLOSE UP of RUS bringing the cover under his chin and burying his face.
PAGE 42
PANEL 1
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY whispering into RUS’S ear as he cries.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“There it is...there is the truth of it. All you are is what you can get out of people...”
PANEL 2:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY hunched over RUS, the scattered XBOX and components in the FOREGROUND.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Beta left you so you couch surfed and bummed around Portland, You left Reghan (the only person who could stand you) and ended up living in your parents garage (at 25) now you're walking out again to go where? play video games with Darin?
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Solid plan.”
PANEL 3:
WIDESHOT of ELEVATOR EXTERIOR stopped on the ground floor
SFX:
“DING!”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY holding the strap to the elevator door. Looking down at RUS who is still writhing on the floor,
JUDY TURNKEY:
“This is as good as it is ever going to get for you Rus. This is the only person who’s going to be able to tolerate you. If I were you, I would turn around. You don't want to spend the rest of your life alone...”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY opening the freight elevator.
PANEL 7:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY looking down at RUS.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“...facing your demons.”
PANEL 7
GROUND SHOT of RUS crawling at us, JUDY TURNKEY kicking his belongs across the floor.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Don't forget your shit!”
PANEL 8
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Heh heh heh.”
PAGE 43
PANEL 1:
APARTMENT BUILDING EXTERIOR WIDE SHOT of DARINS car jamming to his tunes. Side door of the appartment building in shot.
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS coming out of the side door, hugging the XBOX like a life preserver.
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT looking into the car through the windshield. RUS throwing the XBOX in the back. DARIN looking up at him.
DARIN:
“That it?”
RUS:
“Yeah lets get the fuck out of here.”
PANEL 4:
SHOULDER SHOT OF RUS AND DARIN in car. RUS in FOREGROUND. RUS looking exhausted and sad, DARIN smiling, reaching into the drivers door compartment.
RUS:
“Check it out…”
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of DARIN holding up a copy of Resident Evil 4
DARIN:
“BOwwww”
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP OF RUS feigning a smile
RUS:
“Sweet. Yeah. Awesome.”
PANEL 7:
WIDE SHOT of car squeaking out of the driveway,
DARIN(off shot):
“LETS GO KILL SOME MUTHAFUCKIN ZOMBIES!”
PAGE 44
PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT ARIEAL SHOT of the AIRPORT MALL EXTERIOR, a wasteland and a relic of 80’s capitalism, run down, parking lot spotted with cars.
PANEL 2:
WIDE SHOT of AIRPORT MALL INTERIOR. A small line has formed in front of an Orange Julius, people smoke surrounded by plants in the mall smoking section.
PANEL 3:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of ORANGE JULIUS ASSOCIATE. A HOMELESS man is looking up at the menu OFF SHOT.
HOMELESS MAN:
“How much is the Orange Julius.”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of ORANGE JULIUS ASSOCIATE looking bored and disinterested.
ORANGE JULIUS ASSOCIATE:
“A small is 99 cents, A medium is 1.59 and a large is 1.99.”
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of HOMELESS MAN, behind him last in line we can see RUS looking impatient.
HOMELESS MAN:
“Yeah that sounds good I’ll take that one.”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of The ORANGE JULIUS LINE, RUS walking away looking irritated.
RUS:
“For Fucks Sake…”
ORANGE JULIUS ASSOCIATE:
“Which one sir?”
PANEL 7:
WIDE SHOT of RUS walking by stores, many spaces are shut and empty.
PANEL 8:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS walking by in profile, a HOMELESS TEEN is sitting in the smoking section going through the ash tray.
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PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of HOMELESS TEEN looking up from ashtray in FOREGROUND watching RUS walk by.
HOMELESS TEEN:
“Hey man, you gota smoke.”
PANEL 2:
COWBOY SHOT of RUS reaching into his coat pocket.
PANEL 3:
WIDE SHOT of RUS lighting the HOMELESS TEENS cigarette.
PANEL 4:
WIDE SHOT of RUS continuing through the mall, in the foreground there is a sign printed on perferated copy paper pined up over a store all by itself that reads “Hard to Find Video”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking into the video store pop up.
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM INTERIOR SHOT OF HARD TO FIND VIDEO. VHS lines the walls and on racks. In the back is a sign that says ARCADE. Castlevania can be seen through the doorway, but more are stacked further back. An attendant sits behind the counter, her beehive popping up from behind the counter.
PANEL 7:
CLOSE UP of RUS eyes bright
RUS:
“Castlevania arcade? Awesome.”
PANEL 8:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY peering over the counter holding her Redbook magazine smiling broadly looking a little older.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Good afternoon let me know if there is anything I can help you with.”
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PANEL 1:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking a fright.
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY’s face peering over the counter, her signature bridge work smile revealing herself.
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP OF RUS’S mouth partly open, saliva sticking to his lips.
RUS:
“Uh...”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY looking at her magazine.
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking in profile down the back of the racks. Maybe this panel could be long with multiple versions of RUS as he is thinking.
RUS(thinking):
“Oh my god oh my god oh my god oh my god oh my god oh my god oh my god…”
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PANEL 1:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking at a dvd with his eyes darted over to where JUDY TURNKEY is sitting off shot.
RUS(thinking):
“What are you going to do? You have to do something, you have to say something. Oh my god is that her?
Jesus Christ Russel of course it is. Yes it is fucking her. How fucking pathetic. A video store?! Are you fucking kidding me
? You have to say something. What are you going to do?”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking down the ally at us looking at the dvd but still with his eyes on JUDY TURNKEY who is OFF SHOT.
RUS(thinking):
“Why did you say those awful things to you. Why did you consistently target me in a class of kids who acted just as crazy as I did? Why did you always put on a smile to Mr. Butler and my parents but as soon as it was just me and you…”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY looking over her magazine with a fake smile, at RUS who is off shot.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Just to let you know we close in 15 minutes…”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS facing the videos looking at us with a fake smile.
RUS:
“Kaaay”(add music note)
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY back to reading her Redbook.
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT as if we are another shopper in another aisle looking at RUS over the top of the dvd rack. RUS facing the dvds but looking at JUDY TURNKEY who is off shot.
JUDY TURNKEY(thinking):
“You could forgive her, “You know you made my 5th grade year awful, but I'm sure you were doing your best and I learned alot about being strong.” You could come out the better person…”
PANEL 7:
WIDE SHOT JUDY TURNKEY in FOREGROUND reading her magazine. RUS approaching.
RUS:
“Fuck it.”
PAGE 48
PANEL 1: OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking down at JUDY TURNKEY looking up at him from her Redbook.
RUS:
“Excuse me, do you know if you have a copy of The Beastmaster.”
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY leaned back casually in her chair smiling.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“You know, I don't think so but I can call you if we get a copy in.”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS in profile looking down at JUDY TURNKEY who is off shot. We can see into the arcade in the background, dull blue light silhouettes the features of the arachnid version of JUDY TURNKEY.
RUS:
“That's fine, thanks anyway.
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking away towards us. JUDY TURNKEY still sitting, looking back at her magazine.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Come back soon…”
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, his head turned back to JUDY TURNKEY. Arachnid JUDY TURNKEY moving closer in from the darkness of the arcade.
RUS:
“Turnkey right?”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS turned back around facing JUDY TURNKEY. She is peering over her magazine suspiciously
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Yes?”
PANEL 7:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS with his arms open smiling widely looking at JUDY TURNKEY(OFF SHOT)
RUS:
“It’s me Russel Goss from Hal Holbrook Middle, I was in your 5th grade class!”
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PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY rising up off her chair, setting down her magazine.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“RUSSEL?! RUS GOSS? Oh my goodness I can not believe it, look at you! How have you been?”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT or RUS and JUDY TURNKEY in profile looking at each other eye to eye. The background shows the empty mall.
RUS:
“I have been good, I’ve been GREAT.”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking straight at us. Wild eyed and sweating. I think it is important that he addresses the reader because it puts them in Turnkeys shoes.
RUS:
“I've been down to Portland going to art school, Working on comics, doing a little acting.”
PANEL 4:
SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY tilting her head to her side, clasping her hands together revealing the same claws she had years ago.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Oh Rus that is so wonderful to hear, you were such a talent.”
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking to the exit.
RUS:
“>sniff< Yeah, Yeah it's been great, listen, I just wanted you to know…”
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking straight at us smiling wildly
RUS:
“...you made my 5th grade year a living hell and when you die I hope you're pissed off and alone.”
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PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT OF RUS and JUDY TURNKEY staring at each other. ARACHNID JUDY TURNKEY falling to the right.
PANEL 2:
WIDE SHOT of RUS and JUDY TURNKEY staring at each other. ARACHNID JUDY TURNKEY falling to the floor.
SFX:
“FLUMP!”
PANEL 3:
SHOULDER SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY her face drawn and solemn.
JUDY TURNKEY:
“Well Russel, I can see you haven't changed.”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking out of the VIDEO STORE, JUDY TURNKEY standing behind the counter looking straight ahead.
PANEL 5:
WIDE SHOT of MALL INTERIOR RUS power walking toward us with a giddy stupid grin.
PANEL 6:
WIDE SHOT of MALL INTERIOR RUS running toward us, looking back.
PANEL 7:
WIDE SHOT of AIRPORT MALL parking lot, RUS running to his car.
PAGE 51
PANEL 1:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS running to his car, there is obviously a figure in the driver's seat.
PANEL 2:
SHOULDER SHOT INTERIOR OF car, in the FOREGROUND is the blue skinned corpse of JUDY TURNKEY looking out the window. Through the window we can see RUS looking in, confused.
PANEL 3:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, JUDY TURNKEY corpse looking up him motionless.
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP OF RUS smiling.
RUS:
“That’s it for you mother fucker.”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS car with the drivers door open, RUS pulling out the corpse. Its long arachnid legs revealing that this is clearly not the person he just left in the mall, but his imaginary phantom.”
PANEL 6:
FOOT SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY in the foreground withered away, flies buzzing around her. RUS driving away.
PAGE 52
PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of RUS PARENTS HOUSE. RUS’S car in the driveway.
RUS(OFF SHOT):
“...and then I said, When you die I hope you're pissed off and alone!”
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking at us smiling like a mad man.
LANNY(OFF SHOT):
“You shouldn't have said that.”
PANEL 3:
SHOULDER SHOT of LANNY standing in the kitchen next to the dining roomtable.
PANEL 4:
WIDESHOT of RUS and LANNY standing at opposite ends of the kitchen. RUS looking down at the floor.
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT RUS looking down.
RUS:
“Well it’s more than you ever said.”
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of LANNY looking drawn and dejected now.
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT through the door as RUS is approaching it to leave.
LANNY:
“I hope this brings you peace Russel.”
PANEL 7:
WIDE SHOT of RUS’s PARENTS HOUSE. RUS is walking to the garage, snow is falling.
PAGE 53
PANEL 1
HIGH ANGLE SHOT of RUS walking through the garage to his bed.
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS flopping onto his bed
SFX:
“FLOP!”
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP of RUS with his hand on his forehead.
RUS:
“sigh. I got to get out of here.”
PANEL 4: WIDE SHOT of RUS sitting at computer in the garage.
PANEL 5: OVER the SHOULDER SHOT of RUS typing words onto a website called ART SCHOOL
-MID PAGE BREAK-
PANEL 6: WIDE SHOT of RUS looking in the mailbox across the streets from his PARENTS HOUSE
PANEL 7:
POINT OF VIEW SHOT of RUS looking at a letter with the ART SCHOOL letter head. it reads:
Dear Mr. Rus,
Based on your ability to take out an exorbitant amount of debt we would like to invite you to come to art school.
sincerly,
John Johnson c.e.o.
Art School Inc.
PANEL 8:
WIDE SHOT of RUS running down the driveway to his parents house.
PAGE 54
PANEL 1:
WIDESHOT of a Greyhound Bus. RUS, LANNY and REGHAN are standing in front of RUS.
LANNY:
“Do you have your ticket?”
RUS:
“Yes mom.”
PANEL 2:
SHOULDER SHOT of LANNY REGHAN standing behind her looking down.
LANNY:
“Make sure…”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS approaching REGHAN as his mom touches him on the shoulder.
PANEL 4:
RUS taking REGHAN by the hand, she is looking down.
REGHAN:
“I'll call you when I get to Portland.”
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of REGHAN looking down.
REGHAN:
“Ok.”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT with LANNY in the FOREGROUND looking over her shoulder at RUS and REGHAN as they embrace.
PANEL 7:
WIDESHOT of RUS getting on the Greyhound Bus. LANNY and REGHAN in the foreground.
PANEL 8:
HIP SHOT of RUS turning back from the bus to look smiling.
PANEL 9:
MEDIUM SHOT of LANNY with her arm around REGHAN. LANNY is smiling waving, REGHAN is looking down.
PAGE 55
PANEL 1:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS looking at his ticket.
PANEL 2:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS people are sitting, a few in the distance are putting luggage in overhead compartments. The CORPSE OF JUDY TURNKEY is sitting in a window seat.
PANEL 3:
CLOSE UP OF RUS looking irritated.
PANEL 4:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS looking down at JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE who is staring at the window.
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS putting his bags in the overhead compartment looking up at his bags.
RUS:
“I’m not taking you with me.”
PANEL 6:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS and JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE sitting together, people talk and settle in around them. RUS looking straight ahead.
PANEL 7:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE staring lifelessly out the window. RUS turned to her.
RUS:
“I’m over it.”
PANEL 8:
WIDE SHOT of the bus driving down the freeway.
PAGE 56
PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS standing in front of ART SCHOOL.
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of class room. Instructor is in the FOREGROUND and back to us. RUS is in the front row smiling and alert. Classmates are tired, and lithless.
PANEL 3:
RUS sitting at a table with others in the classroom after it had been split up into groups. CASEY is at this table.
PANEL 4:
RUS talking to CASEY in the commons, they are both smiling.
PANEL 5:
RUS and CASEY playing board games with friends in an apartment.
PANEL 6:
RUS putting money in a jar on the floor by the bed.
PANEL 7:
RUS kneeling in front of CASEY on the sidewalk. People eating in a restaurant look on and smile.
PANEL 8:
CASEY holding her hands to her chest crying, as people walk by, looking back smiling.
(Should there be some symbol that defines the passage of time? Like a single panel with a leaf on water or something? Just a break, that lets the reader know we are about to jump? Perhaps this can be achieved by a simple page turn)You solved this with MID PAGE BREAKS
PAGE 57
PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of RUS and a priest standing in ankle deep seawater on the beach underneath a drift wood arbor. A congregation of people stand around them.
PANEL 2:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS. CASEY walking towards us, on the beach, dressed in a bridal gown.
PANEL 3:
FOOT SHOT of CASEY’s feet walking into the surf, RUS legs are in FOREGROUND
sfx:
“Shhhhhhhhh”
PANEL 4:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS, CASEY looking up at him smiling.
PANEL 5:
OVER HEAD SHOT of RUS, CASEY and PRIEST. The water is low by their feet.
PRIEST:
“Welcome everyone to this wonderful union between Casey and Rus...
PANEL 6:
OVER HEAD SHOT of RUS, CASEY and PRIEST as the surf comes in.
PRIEST:
“When Casey came to me and asked, Father Steve, would you be willing to marry us on the beaches of this great land, I was hesitant.”
SFX:
“SHHHHHHHH.”
PANEL 7:
OVERHEAD SHOT of RUS, CASY and PRIEST as the surf goes out again
PRIEST:
“After all, marriage is a sacrament, and therefore should be performed in Gods House.”
SFX:
“shhhhhh.”
PANEL 8:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of PRIEST as RUS and CASEY look at PRIEST. The congregation can be seen surrounding them.
PRIEST:
“But after she described to me the love she had found I could not stand in their way. For what is Gods House but the very world He created.”
PANEL 9,10,11:
CLOSE UP SHOTS of the CONGREGATION NUMBER looking emotional and teary eyed.
PAGE 58
PANEL 1:
OVERHEAD SHOT of RUS, CASEY and PRIEST as the surf comes in again, carrying with it seaweed and debris to collect around the trios feet.
PRIEST:
“and Rus is a fine young man.I have had the pleasure of speaking with him, and I know his heart is good.”
SFX:
“SHHHHHH.”
PANEL 2:
OVERHEAD SHOT of RUS, CASEY and PRIEST as the surf goes out again, some of the debris left behind.
PRIEST:
“Now if we can just get him baptized...”
Congregation:
“Heh heh heh…”
SFX:
“shhhhhh.”
PANEL 3:
OVERHEAD SHOT of RUS, CASY and PRIEST as the surf comes in. The bloated remains of JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE washing up between RUS and CASEY.
PRIEST:
“I kid, of course the fact is… (inaudible).”
SFX:
“SHHHHH.”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking down, frowning.
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE looking up at us lifelessly.
PANEL 6:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS looking down at us.
OFF SHOT:
“Rus?”
PANEL 7:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking up at us.
PANEL 8:
POINT OF VIEW SHOT of RUS PRIEST and CASEY looking at us.
PAGE 59
PANEL 1:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking confused.
RUS:
“Uh...I do.”
PANEL 2:
WIDE SHOT of congregation in the FOREGROUND back to. CASEY with her hand over her face. PRIEST smiling widely, JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE laying on the beach at their feet.
CONGREGATION:
“Ha ha ha ha.”
PRIEST:
“Let’s not put the cart before the horse son.”
PANEL 3:
OVER the SHOULDER SHOT of RUS. CASEY looking at him smiling lovingly. PRIEST smiling.
PRIEST:
“Your words first Russel.”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS, CASEY and PRIEST with JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE at their feet.
RUS:
“Right … of course...sorry.”
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE staring at us.
RUS:
“Judy… uh Casey, I mean,
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT of CONGREGATION looking at each other questionably.
PANRL 7:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS and CASEY looking at each other
RUS:
from the moment I saw you...”
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY Corpse staring at us, the surf washing up around her.
RUS:
“I knew that you were the one for me.”
SFX:
“SHHHHH”
PANEL 9:
CLOSE UP of JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE the surf pulling away an eye is missing.
RUS:
“I, uh… I think, I mean I know that our life w-w-will be filled with…”
SFX:
“shhhhh”
PANEL 10:
CLOSE UP OF JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE’S eye socket with a crab crawling out of it.
RUS(OFF SHOT:
“oh god...”
PAGE 60
SPLASH PAGE:
OVERHEAD SHOT of RUS placing the wedding ring on CASEY’s finger. JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE in the surf below them looking up.
PRIEST:
“Man and Wife…”
PAGE 61
PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of a hospital.
CASEY:
“Ssssssst”
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP of CASEY in profile, her hair up, her face squinting, her teeth bare.
Anesthesiologist (OFF SHOT):
“3,2.. and all done.”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of CASEY sitting on the bed with her back exposed. The ANESTHESIOLOGIST on a short chair administering an epidural. RUS facing CASEY holding her hand.
RUS:
“Great job sweetheart.”
PANEL 4:
CASEY laying down, RUS sitting next to her, the ANESTHESIOLOGIST in FOREGROUND back to us.
ANESTHESIOLOGIST:
“Well I’m done here, I’ll come back in an hour to see if you need anything.”
CASEY:
“Thank you.”
PANEL 5:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking down at CASEY who is looking at him crying.
CASEY:
“I’m sorry I wanted to, I really did.”
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP OF RUS burying his face into the side of CASEY’s face.
RUS:
“Hey you stop that, you are exhausted and this will give you the relief you need, you don't have anything to prove to anyone. Soon we’ll have a beautiful healthy little baby and that’s all that matters…”
PANEL 7:
CLOSE UP of CASEY, RUS arms around her.
CASEY:
“God, I love you so much.”
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP OF RUS, CASEY hair surrounding him.
RUS:
“I love you too sweetheart…”
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PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of hospital exterior at night.
CASEY(OFF SHOT):
“UUURRRRRRRRRRrrrrrr!”
PANEL 2:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS holding CASEY HAND, the MIDWIFE in between CASEY’S legs.
MIDWIFE:
“Ok Casey, we are almost there, for real now, when I say, I need you to give me a good long push. Okay?”
RUS:
“You can do this sweetheart.”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of CASEY crunched up, RUS supporting her back, with her leg in the crook of his arm.
CASEY(OFF SHOT):
“Ahhhhhhhh God DAMN IT!”
MIDWIFE:
“aaaand we’re here!”
BABY:
“WAAAAAAAAAAhhhhhhh”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of MIDWIFE passing the baby to CASEY. RUS back to us, blocking the view of the baby.
MIDWIFE:
“Yes, yes, I know I know, here’s your mama here’s your mama…”
BABY:
“WAAAAAAAAAaa”
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of RUS with a look of dread on his face.
CASEY:
“Oh Russel…”
PAGE 63
SPLASH PAGE:
CASEY sitting up, her chest exposed, her hair a mess, cradling in her arms is the miniature JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE, dead and lifeless. RUS in FOREGROUND looking aghast and revolted. (Tales for the Crypt, old pulp horror comic style?)_
CASEY:
“Isn’t he handsome?”
PAGE 64
PANEL 1:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS doing the dishes looking at us smiling. He is middle aged now, with a receding hairline, light grey showing on his temples and chin. His eyes are kind but tired.
KIDS:
“I’m not it, Gary’s not it, and Lillys not it, so you gotta!”
KIDS:
“Nu Uh!”
KIDS:
“UH HUH!!
PANEL 2:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking out the window as he continues doing the dishes. In the distance we can see kids playing tag around a lone tree on a hill.
LILLY:
“UGH! (sigh) Fiiiiine!”
KIDS:
“AHahahah!”
PANEL 3:
LOW ANGLE SHOT OUTSIDE in the grass (where JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE will appear later) Children are running away from LILLY as she tries to tag them. The house is seen in the distance.
PHONE:
“RIIIIIIiiiiiinnnnng...RIIIIIIIIiiiiiiiiiinnnnng”
PANEL 4:
CLOSE UP SHOT of RUS picking up a wall mounted landline phone.
PANEL 5:
RUS cradling the telephone in his neck, a dish towel slung over his shoulder,
RUS:
“Hello?”
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP of RUS on the phone, the kids all walking off shot.
LARRY SHINING(ON PHONE):
“Yes, good afternoon, is Russel Goss available please.”
PANEL 7:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking out the window Lilly and Brian looking at the house waving.
RUS:
“This is him…”
LILLY:
“WE’RE GOING TO THE BROOK!”
PANEL 8:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS smiling and waving at the kids through the window.
LARRY SHINING:
“Yes, Mr. Goss my name is Larry Shining im with E&Q how are you today?”
PANEL 9:
OVER HEAD SHOT of RUS’S hands in the sink washing dishes.
RUS(OFF SHOT):
“I’m good. Thanks.”
PANEL 10:
ULTRA WIDE SHOT of RUS house, the kids playing by a brook at the bottom of the panel.
LARRY SHINING:
“That’s good to hear. Mr. Goss, the reason for my call today is that a copy of your comic reached my desk and I'd love to find some time to talk to you about it.”
PAGE 65
PANEL 1:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS turning away from the sink grabbing onto the phone with soapy hands.
RUS:
“Who did you say you were with?”
LARRY SHINING:
“Emmerson and Quinn Publishing House, I'm an editor here. We do art books and a few graphic novels. Your work is right up our ally.”
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking surprised.
RUS:
“Is that right?”
PANEL 3:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS now on the floor leaning against the cabinets. One soapy hand on his forehead in disbelief.
LARRY SHINING:
“From what I'm seeing here absolutely. We'd like to fly you and your family out here to New York, We have people who can show them the sights while we talk shop. How does next week sound?”
PANEL 4:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of CASEY. RUS back to standing with a notepad and pen in one hand and the telephone to his ear in the other. He is close to the receiver about to hang up.
RUS:
“Ok larry. Yeah. Heh. Sounds good, well talk to you then. Okay. THanks again Larry...really. Bye.”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT of CASEY putting the groceries on the counter, RUS in FOREGROUND.
CASEY:
“Who was that sweetheart?”
PANEL 6;
CLOSE UP of RUS smiling.
RUS:
“ E&Q.”
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM SHOT with his arms hide and open ecstatic.
RUS:
“THEY WANT IT!”
PAGE 66
PANEL 1-6: RUS and CASEY in different poses as they dance around the kitchen holding each other jumping up and down, screaming with excitement.
PANEL 7:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS hugging CASEY. RUS is facing the window with his face in her neck.
CASEY:
“I’m so proud of you Rus.”
PANEL 8:
CLOSE UP SHOT of RUS looking up from CASEY’S shoulder a look of dread on his face.
PANEL 9:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS still holding onto CASEY, out the window we can see JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE laying under a tree.
CASEY:
“I told you it was good.”
PAGE 67
PANEL 1:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking out the window, CASEY pulling back with a questionable look on her face.
CASEY:
“Are you okay Rus?”
PANEL 2:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of CASEY looking up at RUS who has fixed his gaze out the window.
RUS:
“Yeah…uh huh… I'm fine.”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS holding CASEY by the shoulders,
RUS:
“I’m great really. It’s just...the kids are down by the brook, I’m going to go get them and bring them up so we can tell them the good news… ”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking out the sliding glass door turned back to face CASEY.
RUS:
“...and about our trip to New York!”
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of CASEY staring in disbelief.
CASEY:
“WHAT!”
PANEL 6:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS with his thumb and forefinger pressed together in a symbol of blue blood refinement.
RUS:
“They want to “fly us out.”
PANEL 7:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of CASEY as she throws a kitchen towel at RUS who is walking out into the back yard.
CASEY:
“You dork!”
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PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of RUS standing in the backyard, rolling green grass in the foreground. The tree and JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE not in shot.
KIDS(off shot):
“hahahahah!”
SFX(off shot):
“Splash...splash.”
PANEL 2:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking serious at us.
SFX:
“splash”
KIDS(off shot)
“Lilly!”
PANEL 3:
OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking at the tree and JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE underneath.
PANEL 4:
WIDE SHOT of RUS walking in profile to the tree with JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE underneath.
PANEL 5:
JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE in the FOREGROUND under the tree, RUS cresting the hill.
SFX:
“BUzzz”
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP of RUS looking down at JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE.
PANEL 7:
JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE looking up at RUS with a dead eye, more decomposed than ever. (Make sure that the three times JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE appears she is more and more decomposed each time.)
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PANEL 1:
WIDE SHOT of RUS sitting down next to JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE under the tree.
RUS:
“ah.”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT of JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE and RUS looking back at the house, the kids far down below still playing in the brook, the sun setting behind the house.
PANEL 3:
SHOULDER SHOT JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE and RUS in profile.
RUS:
“I get it now. I carried you around to witness all my failures. I manifested you at my lowest points to remind me that I deserved everything I was getting. I was the one who breathed life into that wretched curse you place upon me.
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS looking down with his arms draped over his knees with a piece of grass in his hand. The rotted shoulder of JUDY TURNKEYS CORPSE is just within shot.
RUS:
“What was wrong with you? I was just a kid.”
PANEL 5:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS and JUDY TURNKEY CORPSE in PROFILE. RUS turned to look at her with a disgusted look on his face.
RUS:
“How bad could I have been?”
PANEL 6:
WIDE SHOT of RUS’S property, the children walking up from the book.
RUS:
“I wish the past was not so foggy.”
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PANEL 1:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking OFF SHOT at something towards the house, (presumably the children coming up from the brook.)
RUS:
“...my memories of that year are not as dependable as they once were. So I’m left to wonder, if you were truly the monster I have made you out to be over the years.”
PANEL 2:
SHOULDER SHOT with JUDY TURNKEYS CORPSE in the FOREGROUND, RUS still looking down at the house, which can be seen in the BACKGROUND.
RUS:
“God knows that withered husk I found in the video store that day was not the Godzilla I remember.”
PANEL 3:
SAME SHOT as PANEL 8, but RUS turned to JUDY TURNKEYS CORPSE with a sympathetic look on his face.
PANEL 4:
Spider climbing across JUDY TURNKEYS CORPSE face.
PANEL 5:
CLOSE UP of spider crawling into an empty eye socket.
RUS:
“I thought that by telling you to go die alone, I would be released from the burden of carrying you around.”
PANEL 6:
CLOSE UP of RUS hands spinning a piece of grass end to end between his two fingers.
RUS:
“...but all it did was turn your ghost into a corpse. You went from haunting my failures to occupying my victories.”
PANEL 7:
SHOULDER SHOT of RUS looking out across the field with JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE in the FOREGROUND.
RUS:
“I don't know where you are now, and I don’t know if you ever think about that day in the Airport Mall, but if it brings you any pain…”
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PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS and JUDY TURNKEY with RUS turned to look at her.
RUS:
“...I am sorry.”
PANEL 2:
CLOSE UP detail of JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE.
RUS:
“I’m sorry if you have carried around my curse like I carried around yours. I’m sorry if you did end up dying alone and angry.”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS standing now, looking out across the land, his hand ringing the back of his neck. JUDY TURNKEYS’S CORPSE sitting on the ground behind him staring up at him as lifeless as always. (It does appear that her head is following him from panel to panel.)
RUS:
“If that did happened...god,”
PANEL 4:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS back to us with his head turned over his shoulder looking down at JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE.
RUS:
“I didn’t mean it,”
PANEL 5:
WIDESHOT of RUS and JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE under the tree, the setting sun in the BACKGROUND. The interior lights of the house have come on and we can see the figures of children and CASEY inside. The front door, left open.
RUS:
“We are all doing the best we can. I get that now. Some of us just get bowled over by those who are doing a worse job than others.”
PANEL 6:
LOW ANGLE SHOT of RUS looking down at JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE who is in the FOREGROUND.
RUS:
“If I ever see you again, I’ll make sure to apologize.”
PANEL 7:
CLOSE UP SHOT of RUS with his back to JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE, which can be seen in the BACKGROUND.
PANEL 8:
MEDIUM SHOT of RUS walking down the hill away from the tree and JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE.
RUS:
...but I’m done carrying you around.”
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PANEL 1:
MEDIUM SHOT OF JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE leaning against the tree.
CASSY(OFF SHOT):
“Rus honey where have you been, I thought you were getting the kids?”
PANEL 2:
MEDIUM SHOT OF JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE slightly falling over.
RUS(OFF SHOT):
“Just walking around.”
PANEL 3:
MEDIUM SHOT OF JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE fALLEN over onto her side.
CASSY(OFF SHOT):
“Well get down here and tell the kids the good news.”
Kid:
“Did you use the potty all by yourself Daddy?”
PANEL 4:
MEDIUM SHOT OF JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE on her side, grass growing up around her like mold.
ALL LAUGHING(OFF SHOT):
“Hahahaha”
RUS(OFF SHOT):
“Yup that's right, I’m a big boy now.”
PANEL 5:
MEDIUM SHOT OF JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE almost completely covered in grass.
RUS:
“Let’s all get some ice cream.”
PANEL 6:
MEDIUM SHOT OF JUDY TURNKEY’S CORPSE now a mound of grass next to the tree.
RUS:
“ …and I’ll tell you.”
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SPLASH PAGE
MEDIUM SHOT of the mound of grass next to the tree on the hill with a flower growing out of it.
[The End]